The messages below all suffer from some kind of noise, which makes them hard to understand. For each message, identify sender, receiver, code, channel and context. Also make a suggestion for improvement.
Hotel Sun Beach Plaza is known for its luxury, peace and solitude. Because of this large herds of celebrities from all over the world flock here to enjoy our facilities. The management now offers you the chance to become part of its unique team.
Job ad, India
Sender
Receiver
Code
Channel
Context
employer
job seeker
writing
newspaper, website?
job ad
Improvement
For this reason, numerous celebrities, have stayed with us to enjoy our facilities.
Further explanation
The noun "herd" and the verb "to flock" are used for animals.
So, Mr Vanden Berghe, tell me. Who are you? Why did you decide to apply with HSBC London?
In the first place, I am a man who stands still by the reality and [pause] the reality is that or you can stay at home and not evoluate or you can go to abroad where there happens a lot.
Job interview, London
Sender
Receiver
Code
Channel
Context
[of first utterance]
recruiter
[of second utterance]
candidate
[of first utterance]
candidate
[of second utterance]
recruiter
spoken language
face to face
job interview
Improvement
Being a realist, I am very much aware that my career opportunities in London, which is the financial heart of Europe, are far greater than in my homeland.
Further explanation
To stand still by the reality is a non-existing literal translation of a Dutch proverb.
The word "to evoluate" does not exist.
... so one could safely state that my expertise and enthusiasm leave you nothing to hope for. I will be more than happy to prove this during an interview...
Extract from cover letter, Belgium
Sender
Receiver
Code
Channel
Context
candidate
recruiter
writing
letter
cover letter: closing paragraph
Improvement
... expertise and enthusiasm are the best you could wish for.
Further explanation
When somebody leaves you nothing to hope for, you'd want to fire him.
As it says in my letter of recommendation, my previous employer appreciated it that I allowed him to take advantage of my computer skills at any time.
Extract from cover letter, Germany
Sender
Receiver
Code
Channel
Context
candidate
recruiter
writing
letter
cover letter middle section
Improvement
... my previous employer appreciated it that I was at his beck and call whenever my computer skills were needed.
Further explanation
To take advantage of somebody has got a very negative connotation.
Sender
Receiver
Code
Channel
Context
candidate
recruiter
writing
e-mail
application by e-mail
Improvement
The sender's e-mail address is hardly appropriate, especially when you consider the organisation he is applying with.
